I've just finished my first children's book and I'm in the middle of setting up the illustrations for it. I just need someone to go through it and edit any grammatical errors and who can see the story for what it is.

The story is about a young girl who fails and decides never to follow her dream again. She learns from another that falling is a part of the process and that she needs to get herself back up.

The story is too wordy, so I am hoping to find someone who can help me trim it down for children.

Thank you!